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thank you so much for all of your feedback :) this poem was written in about 3 minutes right before rushing off to class, with little editing, so it's bound ...

hmm this is not good that you think the person kills themselves at the end, because what i was trying to go for is that through all the loneliness and ...

This is so beautiful in it's simplicity! The only thing I would change though, is move the "a constant" (3rd stanza, third line) to the beginning of the fourth line. ...

I liked this poem a lot when I first read it, but after reading Claudette's corrections, I loved it! Great job, and I agree, I looved the part about pearls ...

Thanks you guys so much I'll be sure too try rewriting it. I pretty much thought it was a doomed poem, but your comments saved my belief in my own ...

Aw thanks :) But which parts confuse you? Let me know so I can see what I can do about it. =)

Thanks so much for your feedback ^_^

It sounds funny :D It's a simple poem. Nothing special, but I like it.

This poem was too abstract and that made it hard to read, so I think you need to simple it a bit and try to get your point across more ...

I did, indeed. :D And once again, I am in love with this poem. Good luck! (not that you need it, hehe)

It's interesting, but I think you ended too aburptly and it needs someting more, to flow into a smoother ending. Hope this helped :D

I love it, it's so dark and raw the energy is amazing :D

Thanks! ^_^ I've made some changes, but I'm still working on it! And you were right about Unwated, I meant to title it Unwanted, lol

I enjoyed reading this poem. I loved the part about his tongue being so sharp that one day it'll slice his throat, although I would omit the word 'own' before ...

Why is Kara so upset over not being liked by as many guys as Kristy?