JediDeadpool

Hey there :) JediDeadpool here for the review!! This is a great intro. You jumped straight into the action, letting us learn what is going on as we progress. There's ...

I don't know why it posted my review twice... my mistake

Hey there! JediDeadpool here, just tidying up the green room a bit. Remember please that I'm actually a really nice guy, I'm just pointing out stuff that sticks out. So, ...

Hey there! Just tidying up the green room a bit. I agree with Meandbooks; the POV switching is tiresome, and makes it harder to read the book. You can't focus ...

Hey there! Long time, no YWS. This review brought to you from THE FUTURE!! (Plot twist: it's 2016 and we still don't have flying cars. Sorry :( ) HOWEVER! We ...

Greetings! Watchdog1324 here with the first review ^-^ I have to say, I loved this. You have really powerful imagery that really pulled me along. I like the idea of ...

I think this should totally be part of a longer story! This intro (if you choose to use it as one) has such great potential to be part of something ...

Seeing as I haven't read the other 18 chapters, I'm not qualified to say how this goes with the rest of the story. Nevertheless, I like it! I've never heard ...

I meant to write a review for this a while ago, but I was too choked up with emotion at the time to be coherent. Looking back, the draft of ...

Just a quick not before I read this is in your description you said a hance encounter I think you probably meant to say chance encounter? Now, review. I love ...

So after perusing the green room for something I felt comfortable reviewing, I came upon this. Now, as I haven't seen the original, I can't say as to whether you ...

I've decided to spam you in my own way until you FREAKING PUT OUT THE NEXT CHAPTER YOU JERK *ruffles your hair fondly* This piece is too good to still ...

This is a great start! I say that because I believe you will probably continue this as a novel. I don't understand why you put the first word of each ...

This poem actually brought a tiny tear to my eye as I guiltily glanced behind me at my own waste basket. All too many times, in a fit of despair ...

Watchdog1324 here with an anti-green room review! First off this is a great dialogue. Very natural, I could totally see two people ACTUALLY having this conversation. Your stage directions make ...