Jalmoc

This is definitely a nice refresher to writing! It was a really unique and original idea that captivated me the entire time. Your sentences flow together nicely, giving good description ...

Hey, thanks for the reviews and criticisms! I'll work on what you guys have pointed out. :)

Sorry, it wasn't exactly my best writing. But thanks for the criticism!

Hey, thanks to both of you! I just wrote was on my mind and wanted to see what people thought. Thanks a lot for the reviews. I'll try and work ...

Sorry, double posted.

I loved this! :) It was very short as others said, but short isn't always bad! I'd like some descriptive details of the main character though. I feel like I ...

Man... You must have some serious thoughts brewing in that head of yours. Lol. I once again don't see anything wrong which is really good! (But I'm not the best ...

Well, I was talking with my girlfriend, and she saw a bunny out the window and said how adorable they are, and I said they're evil because they help crazy ...

Well, I was talking with my girlfriend, and she saw a bunny out the window and said how adorable they are, and I said they're evil because they help crazy ...

I loved this!! :D lol. Great idea!!

Hi there!! I thought this piece was very interesting! I'd love to read more if you add on to it! Keep Writing! --Jalmoc

This is very true... But sometimes, the brakes don't always work. ;)

Hey guys, I really appreciate the reviews!! The reason that the capitalization is off is because I wrote this from my iPad lol.

Should be in poetry as everyone else stated lol. This was very good otherwise! :) Keep Writing!! --Jalmoc

Very nice way to reintroduce yourself to YWS. :D lol