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Re: Music To My Ears, Pages 1-14
InuRa here for a review. Literary comments: 1. i thought that it was really great opening, but i don't really understand what was going on at first. Then I understood. ...
Feb 19, 2014 -
Re: To Maggie
Hey. InuRa here for a review This is so sad. I know that the poem was about a man writing a letter to his dead wife. I know because of ...
Feb 5, 2014 -
Re: Left.Behind.
This is a beautiful poem. It touches my soul. It is very heartcrushing. Your choice of words, your line structure and vocab was very well done. here is a tip- ...
Jan 31, 2014 -
Re: To Mind Your Mind
I love this poem. it explains every emotion the human mind thinks. every action the mind makes. your philosphy is that you think that we make the desicions not our ...
Jan 29, 2014 -
Re: Prologue - Together We Make The Elements (Working title)
Oh My God so sad. It also scared me alot. I like writing about souls and stuff too. Just not in the way you did. I have to read Chapter ...
Jan 29, 2014 -
Re: Pause/Play
I love the correlation of pause and play. I love the fact that this story brings memories of when i stood up the bullies in my life. When i broke ...
Jan 29, 2014 -
Re: Motionless
"Motionless, he's still running." I love that sentence. I like it because it contradicts the fact that he's motionless. Also because of the simplicity. People say it's confusing. Not to ...
Jan 29, 2014 -
Re: Bringer
First off, HAPPY BIRTHDAY! I noticed that you turned 18. I'm only 13. This was so sad. I like how you use commas for guotation marks. I didn't know you ...
Jan 29, 2014 -
Re: Flakes
Lightly drop the silken sparks- this line is beautiful. The first line shows a great deal of eloquence and i just started reading it. lost in a world gray and ...
Jan 28, 2014 -
Re: Nightmares
Like other reviewers say- this poem is awesome! You should publish something. Your work reminds me of Edgar Allen Poe. You seem like the new version of Edgar Allen Poe. ...
Jan 28, 2014 -
Re: Double Dare
That was a crazy dare. I think that if you made into a novel, it would be better. It's good so far. I think you should make a sequel. But ...
Jan 28, 2014 -
Re: The Middle of Nowhere, Pt. 2
This story is so suspense. For 14 years old, you really know how to build suspense. That is a rare talent for someone your age. Many 14 year olds can't ...
Jan 28, 2014 -
Re: Little Destiny
This poem brings tears to my eyes. It seems that Destiny's image is still in your mind. I hope that you will not forget the cat. To me the poem ...
Jan 28, 2014