Insomnia

Hey Miya. I quite liked this. It seems like something that would actually happen (not trying to seem sexist, could happen either way around lol). “No, your ok, just jump.” ...

Congrats on making the fifty page mark! That's awesome for you. And all your readers! ;) Umm... just a couple of tihngs that you may have gotten wrong, but i'm ...

Hey. I actually quite liked this. It's really good for your first piece of work on here. It's been said, but maybe you should play around with your italics a ...

I'm not a poet Jenna, so I can't really crit this, but I have to say that I really enjoyed it. :) So good work. Hopefully you keep going with ...

This was great. Sorry, there's not much else I can say. I can see the woman writing this. Just a couple of typos that I saw: No, not know my ...

I liked it Lucy. :o And that's not meant to look shocked, it's just showing that it had an impact. You actually caught the dream in the sort of way ...

I'm just putting some stuff as I find it, so it might be a bit off lol. So... The fire had long gone out, plunging the cosy campsite into gloom. ...

xD Sorry, I didn't see that you'd posted the next part. :o Not that I'm bubbles, but still, I'm here. The funny factor was still pretty high. Althoguh maybe that's ...

Hey Elein! This was great, and now you've got me intrigued. I like your writing style, because it really seems to flow well to me. Some stories on here take ...

You could extend it out, give the character some depth. Just tell us why she's doing what she's doing. There's a scene rather like it in Pet Sematary, by Stephen ...

I liked this once again. You showed us more of the relationship between Jamie and her mother, which I was hoping for sometime soon. :) Just a couple of little ...

I don't know whether you went over the top or not, but it doesn't seem to matter when you're actually reading it. It's really captivating. Just shows how good it ...

Hey Jig. Just reading back on some of your older stuff lol. Just one thing that I noticed that might be wrong, I think. We rarely, if ever come out ...

Garth Nix is one of my favourite authors. I can remember reading the Seventh Tower series back when I was like eight. I loved those back then. I still do ...

Just read the edited version. Seems a lot better now. Just a couple of things I can see to do now. Red lips glistened as she smiled, pulled taut against ...