Insomnia

Hey again Meevs (I get the feeling I'll be saying that a lot over the next few weeks lol). And with that I was hoisted out of the car but ...

Aww. :( That's actually really sad. I was going to wait till tonight before I read more, but I couldn't resist lol. You conveyed your character's emotions really well. :) ...

Hey Sam. :) This was really good; you showed us the image well. Or maybe just people that are familiar with the ocean lol. I quite liked it, and I ...

Hey Fish. I agree with Myth and Sam. This was really fun. Didn't drag on like some thigns you can read. And I'm not just talking about stuff on here ...

Hey again. I think I'm going to limit myself to only critting two of these in a day. Otherwise I'll race through and have nothing to read. xD Anyway, just ...

Hey Meevs. :D I always did say that I'd get around to reading Ice Cubes one day. It was just a bit later than I thought it would be lol. ...

Hey Jig! Just read this, and even though I've read the first part before, it still held my attention. A few problems in here, I think. His breaths were rapid ...

Grrr. :( You're like, the master of cliffhangers. Even if it turns out it might not even be all that important, you build up the suspense. So, that's really cool. ...

Hey Jessica. :) I liked this, it was really well done. And I am interested to see what sort of person she would become. But you actually made that really ...

Wow. That was just a bit of an about face! ;) I almost got left behind, but that was really good. You just can imagine something like that happening, can't ...

This was good. :) It really flowed for me. I think there was just one thing I caught. And accidentally, at that lol. He’s the son of one of my ...

Hey JC. :D Apparently I'm turning into a fan. ;) I’m just looking for a way our of telling you though. *out of telling you? Telling you how I handled ...

Wow. new, shiny story. ;) and his arms where bent awkwardly at his side. Should where be were? =O This is the only thing I found wrong. Good work! :D ...

Well, you asked me to crit this, so =O! This is really good. But I don't have anything to crit, that's the problem. I just find myself wondering if you ...

Hey again lol. There was nothing specific here wrong. You much have edited it well. But i think there were a few places where you should have used commas to ...