Incandescence

Psychoanalytically, this poem is a masterpiece. If Freud could get his hands on this he'd die. That's a backhanded compliment, by the way. The poem was okay-ish. Not great, not ...

This isn't bad, but it didn't connect with me. The irony of you writing a poem about people dying and then saying "they will never understand" was obviously lost on ...

The visual effect of the poem is not at its maximum potential. Example: Than simply fade Away Would most likely have the impact of fading away if it looked more ...

Absolutely brilliant. On the cusp of stunning that only a Salinger could create. Your tone in this poem is that of a trance and the feeling of being someone your ...

Abstraction is somewhat important in poetry. This seemed to lack most of what I would consider to be "abstraction." Other than the entire metaphor which encapsulated the poem, you lacked ...

This could be a great poem. Your redundancy of certain words like "chains" and "bruises" was minimally impacting, though, and sometimes there is more to tell us than what's on ...

I'm not a fan of the last line. Seemed to trite a saying. I understand what it's saying, I think you could reword it and give the sense of being ...

This is good, to an extent. The conversion from "yes" to "no" was not as good as it could be. It seemed to lack something vital to the flow of ...

Blegh. This was absolutely horrific. Don't be preachy with your poetry. I get enough "Regret: The Anti-Drug" everytime I turn on the radio or watch the TV. This should have ...

Ingenius for a political poem. Some of the repetition proved virtuouso, but some repetition terribly fell through the cracks. The poem I liked--your beliefs I do not. Nevertheless, this was ...

This is weakly and sloppily construed. As a politically engaged piece, it was terrible. However, having slapped you in the face, I commend you for believing in something strong enough ...