Incandescence

You're still alive!? Hm...I need to contact Kolache... ER....wait. Anyway, poem was, as per usual, beautiful. Only thing I would do is find another word to replace "Emperor" with. Also, ...

The title of this piece made me cringe. I mean, compulsively cringe. I was afraid I would lapse into an epileptic seizure. Or something. Anyway, this poem was much better ...

I have to disagree with the above comments (don't I always?). First, I want to say that I've read orange peels more interesting and more engaging than this. BUT don't ...

I rarely comment on your works because of your lack of comments on mine. However, I feel this may be a mutual idea. So... This was not as majestic as ...

glitter and all that shit in the air and poetry, with foggy goggles and ersatz writing sessions followed by posts and secret wishes for perverts to like this observing on ...

Kind of air-headed and elementary. There is a certain technique you were striving for; however, you did not pull it off, properly. What you were aiming for, I think, can ...

Well that was an obvious demonstration of your total incompetence and lack of understanding the context of the song. It does not *promote* violence, it only describes the violence occuring. ...

The numbers stay. It's part of my authoritative severity. You must realize, when you read this, it was not written for the general consensus, but only for those who have ...

It was all right. Nothing to grandeur. I mean, it didn't envelop me and really make me read on. Basically, I think if you dropped the rhyme scheme, "jewels of ...

16th August, 1808 I'm not a moron. I know when Napoleon was around. I think you did such a great job with the actual story part of this that you ...

This was far too long for a casual reader. The rhyming of the stanzas wasn't very good. Mind you, it wasn't terrifically lame or boring, but it didn't contribute anything ...

I did not like this because : A. It was too romantic and B. The ending fell apart. The rhyme scheme in the second stanza, intentional or not, was disruptive ...

This is a good idea to incorporate into poetry, but I think you could perhaps aim it away from literally telling us this revelatory information, and guide it more in ...

Doesn't make much sense. The last line should be swapped with the third one, for a coherent thought to be made. I would also replace the "all" with "their" solely ...

The first stanza was very jittery, almost schizophrenic. The idea of one line did not flow into that of the next. The stanzas following were very literal, which made them ...