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Re: Things Fall Apart: Chapter 14: My Parental Units and My Problem
Hey! IamTraunt here to review! I was really looking forward to this chapter! Eek! Nitpick! Or maybe it’s just the calm before the storm. I don't think the 'the' is ...
Jun 18, 2014 -
Re: Falling Deep- Chapter One
Hey, my best buddy :-) IamTraunt here! Nitpicks But then breath filled my chest, and light flooded my eyes, and everything was okay ... not. You just need a space ...
Jun 17, 2014 -
Re: Things Fall Apart: Chapter 13: Fredrian
Hey, RoyalHighness! It's me, your loyal servant, IamTraunt! As you know, I was looking forward to this chapter so much I felt like I'd have a fit if I didn't ...
Jun 16, 2014 -
Re: I Never Thought "I can"
Hey KayKayKoala! IamTraunt here to review! Welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy your time here! ^^ As soon as I read this I felt a deep sorrow. This is ...
Jun 16, 2014 -
Re: Answer
Hey! IamTraunt here as requested! Now, I'm definitely not an expert on poems, (although I just did an exam on them). One of the things I love about poems is ...
Jun 16, 2014 -
Re: Flirtatious Glances, Secret Desires (Excerpt)
Hey! IamTraunt here! Ooo! I love these type of stories, it reminds Jacqueline Wilson's book (I can't remember the name). It was such a good book and you have a ...
Jun 16, 2014 -
Re: A battle between society and self-righteousness.
Hey! IamTraunt here to review this lovely price of work! I love some of the language features you have used in you poem here. You use a lot on integrative ...
Jun 15, 2014 -
Re: Chapter 1
Hey! IamTraunt here to review! Welcome to YWS! So, I was just wondering, after all the '-----', was that you narrating? Or was it part of the story? I was ...
Jun 15, 2014 -
Re: The Golden Days- Chapter 1: Yeah, no, more or less an average weekday
Hey! IamTraunt here to review! Welcome to YWS! Hope you enjoy your time with us! Let's start off with the Nitpicks! Sam Matthews’s day was pretty normal. He woke up, ...
Jun 15, 2014 -
Re: The WIT - Chapter 1
Hey! IamTraunt here to review! Welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy your time here :-) First, let me do some nitpicking! Ben Zane felt the warm air of the ...
Jun 15, 2014 -
Re: Persona Non Grata
Me? As in you? As in... Yeah. Hey! IamTraunt here to review! Now, the wording you have here is simple, yet effective, although you disrupt the flow with adding in ...
Jun 14, 2014 -
Re: The Cottage
Hey! IamTraunt here to review! Can't believe it. No reviews. Short stories are always the hardest to review before someone else! So pleased
Jun 14, 2014 -
Re: 5 minutes outside
Hey! IamTraunt here to review! Now, I'm not an expert on Poems, but I do like to have a read of them, and I found that this one is a ...
Jun 14, 2014 -
Re: The Elephant in the Room - Edit
Hey! IamTruant here as requested! Wow! I love this!
Jun 13, 2014 -
Re: Things Fall Apart: Chapter 12: Unfinished Sentences
Hey! IamTraunt here to review your beautiful peice of work! I've seriously wanted this to happen so bad! And I know I'm not the only one. Some stories are the ...
Jun 13, 2014