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Heya! I think the first stanza is definitely the strongest here. It really launched me into the poem and did a terrific job setting everything up. In the second stanza, ...

Hello Snazz master, I like the premise of the poem. I've always had a thing for refrains. I think my problem with this one stems from my feeling it doesn't ...

Hey! So, you said this is an application entry. It would be nice if we maybe knew what aspects of the application it is supposed to fulfill? That way I ...

Hello again Amindor, It appears we're going to be friends today! :) So this is definitely a stronger poem than the last one I reviewed. It's a little bit cliche, ...

Hello Amindor, First Thing's First. Love your profile picture, in fact, I'd love to call my good friend Bast over to see as I am sure she would gush over ...

Hello Foxy! Not much to say. I enjoyed this narrative. It was a quick, pleasant, touching read. It has a sad but pleasing message and I there's not much in ...

Hi Savvy. I really wish I had a lot to say. I loved your diction! You have a very strong control of language and metaphors you have bound within this ...

Hey there! First, a quick note. The second to last stanza needs some editing due to typos. Now for the real stuff. I like the idea here. I appreciate the ...

Hey there Nyx! I liked your idea regarding patience. I really enjoyed the last stanza. I love when poems have a question in them. It really makes the reader internalize ...

Hey there! This was good, I loved the imagery of the black on white porcelain and of all the other black things. It created a mood. There are just a ...

Hey there! You've already got some really good reviews to take a look at but I'll throw in a few quick thoughts of my own. The story was nice and ...

Hey there Hanorah! This was a nice piece, short and sweet and to the point. I love that in a poem! I will quickly go through the minor editing mistakes ...

Hey there Nicholas! First, assuming I am reading this the way you intended it to be read, I really liked the theme I picked up. The idea that we shouldn't ...

Hey there! First thing's first, I agree that this is not quite free verse. In fact, it is almost perfect refrain poetry. And I love that sort, it is always ...

Unfortunately, I've arrived at the pot party late and it seems Core has taken most of what I had to say :P I have a few corrections: - There should ...