HopelessAbandon

Hi! Just wanted to add a few things I noticed while reading. :) “Please, you can do anything to me…anything, just let my family go.”, a man said with hints ...

Hi! Just a few things to add. The cold wind blew over the barring land I think you meant "barren" Other than that, I think most things have been caught. ...

Hi! Happy Review Day! I'll just jump right in. :) treetops showing were the sun was. Should be "where" not "were" any sign of human passage, if there was a ...

Hello again! I'll just jump right in... Arabella Eterion never seemed to be able to get over her awe of the forest; it was so amazing and beautiful. She had ...

Hi! Here again :) Vajik yelled an incomprehensible order to his captains, whipped out his sword and charged out of the tent with a cry, he was closely followed by ...

Hi! Here for another review! Haha, thank you for the tip earlier. :) How it was events could go so fast after so many years of practically nothing happening. This ...

Hi! Back again for another review. :) "Lying silently in a bed of sparkling, multicolored, magical light laid a girl, she could hardly have been too much older than either ...

Hi! Once again gonna go in depth here. :) " I think I just got mixed up in some oath.”: Don't repeat "oath" "Detrick shook his head in amazement.” You ...

Hi! Back again! This time I'll go a bit more in depth. "The grounds between the castle wall and the keep were filled to overflowing with small white tents in ...

Hi! Just a quick review... I think a lot of the mistakes have been caught already by the person who edited before me, so I just have a few general ...

Hi! Just a quick review... :) "I smelled bacon sizzling downstairs. Again, I reminded myself that Harriet was downstairs.": Try not to repeat the word "downstairs" "My mother stopped cooking ...

Hi! You reviewed something of mine, so I thought I'd return the favor! First off : " With every day I live wondering as one of the ranks of the ...

Hi! Back for another review :) I'm gonna go in depth again, since this is a pretty short submission! "tamers of nature but there was a": comma after "nature" "But ...

Hey! You reviewed a section of my writing, so I thought I'd return the favor to say thanks! I go through and make comments about stuff as I go, and ...

Hi! I edit as I read, so I'll start with some random things I saw and finish up with an overall comment. :) "than staying over night,than moving in together ...