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This was a nice little poem. I enjoyed reading it, but there are a few errors you may want to fix. The flow was nice, but it did mesh here ...

I really did enjoy this poem. The idea of trapping secrets and having a different side to you has always interested me in writing. I do agree the poem could ...

Really interesting poem. (: It had a good flow and gave me a discription of your concept. It all worked well together and the elements of the poem were truly ...

Hello, MaryEvens (: Let me start this review off by saying I really enjoyed your story. The description was wonderful and I truly felt like I was following the character. ...

Very interesting story, although I haven't been able to finish the whole thing yet-- There are a few grammar errors here and there, but to be completely honest, I do ...

Hello there, mybrokenreality (: Let me start this off by saying I really enjoyed this poem! It gave me a great description of the girl's sorrows and I actually felt ...

Hello, Dreamwalker (: I'm glad I stumbled on your poem, and let me just say I throughly enjoyed it. I have to agree with lilymoor on the title; it really ...

I am named for The beginning threw me off. I believe the correct term would be 'I am named after'. a tiny Slavic woman who nonetheless was I think you ...

Very nice story, however I noticed a few things... Smack, smack, smack... My feet pounded softly against the floor as I made my way, slouching, down the corridor. The 'smack' ...

Very nice story, I enjoyed reading it. :) However, something that bothered me a bit... Maybe that’s why we are where we are today. Maybe that’s why there’s not a ...

a slender, fragile age of seventeen. the sky was crying for her, for all the tears she held back - for all the times she pretended didn't exist. a raindrop ...

the one i can count on,the one i can trustplease don't ever fade from my life i need you by my side because without you i would die.i'd have no ...

Dull, bored, crystal, blue eyes flickered back and forth as she tried to make out this once proud, known city. No need for the coma after crystal. A little girl ...

First of all, you used 'Bloom' much to often. It made is sound choppy at many points. Try using different terms, such as 'she', or 'the young girl', or anything ...

All I could think was that those stupid lights were making her and my tear-stained faces all shiny. I felt this sentence was a bit choppy...'all shiny' threw it off ...