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Re: Alone
I really like this. I'm thinking and what popped into my mind was someone trying to be skinny, and its killing her inside. Like agh, I can't think of the ...
May 30, 2011 -
Re: (insert interesting title here)
Creative! I love simple poems like this, but unfortunately the only things that I planned to critique you on were already critiqued by ones who came before me. I love ...
May 30, 2011 -
Re: At least now I know
I really like this poem. As a matter of fact so far I like all of your poems. But in this one I have a bit of a problem. You ...
May 30, 2011 -
Re: Stuck in a Dead F**k
To simply put it, it was somewhat boring. I expected something much more grotesque and interesting. I actually expected a necrophiliac image because of the title...Maybe you meant something else, ...
May 30, 2011 -
Re: Why am I a Christian?
This gave me chills. Its beautiful and I think that any real Christian can relate to this. There are literally tears in my eyes. I'm so glad there are people ...
May 30, 2011 -
Re: 1,000 lilies
This is very....different. I'm really liking your work so far, but this is quite.. confusing. I'm drawing a blank on this one. This sort of sounds like something I would ...
May 30, 2011 -
Re: The Forbidden Fruit
I was bi-curious quite a while ago, after getting hurt badly by this one guy. But, of course my dad is the Holy Christian man and talked of hell and ...
Apr 13, 2011 -
Re: Gaze
I love this poem! I think its because I can relate to it so much, and even though it doesn't rhyme constantly it flows PERFECTLY. I have nothing to critique ...
Apr 13, 2011 -
Re: I have darkness in my veins.
Great job! Very, very emotional, and you pointed out your feelings very well. The only thing that I noticed was this ;D but it only makes my veins bleed faster, ...
Apr 13, 2011 -
Re: Do not click this.
I like how everyone was reeled in cleverly with the title. Great job! It ran very smoothly, so it was nicely written. I liked it very much, and I have ...
Apr 13, 2011 -
Re: Cherry Lane
Great job! I didn't seen anything that you could fix other than putting commas and semi-colons and all that chiz that no one actually likes doing ;) Great job! Loved ...
Apr 13, 2011 -
Re: Time.
I read it very quickly at first, and then went to critique it. I didn't quite get its meaning, but after reading it a second time, It came to me. ...
Apr 13, 2011 -
Re: You Don't Love Me
I think you will get farther with this story if you explain more. I read in one of the comments that you said that this is something your going through, ...
Apr 12, 2011 -
Re: Happiness Found in the Cha-Cha
This is a pretty good poem, and it rolls off my tongue smoothly, but I must say some things just didn't make any sense. It left me a little confused. ...
Apr 12, 2011 -
Re: Annoying
I imagined someone reading this with a very assertive and angry tone. It made me laugh. I love it when people can capture their feelings while making it creative. It ...
Apr 12, 2011
