Published April 13, 2011
Her warm body, so close to mine
Her bright smile, more devious
The way she looks at me
As she slowly creeps towards me
I can see her skin through her shirt
Her dark eyes piercing through me all the way
I wish I wasn't, but I'm dawn in
I wish i wasn't, but I am
The way she lays there so innocently
The way Her smooth touch feels
Her eye intensity sky rockets
My self-control plummets
I go toward her- taking the first, smooth kiss
Her lips, so soft, her body, so warm
As i pull away she looks at me with those eyes
Curious and curiouser
Female on female
Flesh on flesh
I want her in every way, though I wish I didn't
My hand, sliding down her body.
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- isn't it supposed to be "drawn in" ?
- does "Her" had to be capitalized?
[/quote]As i pull away she looks at me with those eyes
Curious and curiouser[/quote]
- capitalize "I"
- "curiouser" or "more curious" ?
- so.. is this a.. YURI?? (girl-to-girl erotic relationship)
[ I love this poem, although I've got some corrections in it (I hope you won't mind! Ha! Ha!)
[ Good job.
-WRITER,MAJOR IN ROMANCE
I was bi-curious quite a while ago, after getting hurt badly by this one guy. But, of course my dad is the Holy Christian man and talked of hell and stuff. I don't think people will ever go to hell because they are being who they want to be. But ANYWHO, back to the poem, I love this, so much. I haven't read a poem about homosexuality yet, and I think this is sweet, yet "sexy". People should really appreciate this, cause I do.