Published April 13, 2011
He channels heat through me with every look
Every gaze he gives me sends shivers
If only he knew, if only he knew
If only he knew I exist
If only he knew the way he makes me feel
For now I watch from a distance
Waiting, watching, smiling
For now I don't exist
O, one day I will
One day he'll know
One day I'll tune in to reality.
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OH wow! This is so beautiful! Well done! I loved every moment of it and your grammar was perfect. No flaws so I can see! Every girl has felt this way before: that the guy she's got a crush on doesn't even notice her...you've captured these feelings excellently!
Well done, be proud of this poem
~Amelia
Thanks very much, its nice to know that someone likes my poems. If you like what you see, another follower would be nice!
I love this poem! I think its because I can relate to it so much, and even though it doesn't rhyme constantly it flows PERFECTLY. I have nothing to critique about this poem because its beautifully written and I wouldn't change anything! I will most definitely check out more of your poems!
Good poem I just shortened a view so the flow still works, although it was ok to begin with it sounds good, that was just a suggestion. Shall read more of your work when I have more time; Good luck and Happy Writing!!!
Soulkana<3