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Hannah

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  • Poetry » Mystery / Suspense, Narrative Re: Those Days

    there are a lot of people who have written about the torture of mother earth, and there are a lot of people who should be, as we have real problems ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Carbology

    Ahh, heartbreaking. The intention, the set up, the base for a really powerful piece is all here, but it needs a little more tweaking before I'd call it solid. And ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Deleted

    Woooooooow~ Color me impressed, this was very well executed, clear, and poignant. The first two stanzas leave nothing to be desired. I can't. I am so glad you wrote them, ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Horror Re: The Sociopath

    this is the right way to do rhyming. i am so happy to see this good example, because by posting this, you've given younger writers a beacon to follow. this ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Lyrics » Narrative, General Re: Unthinkable

    Nice. This was honest, powerful, and carried itself through to the end in a logical pattern. There are a few things that need to be changed, I think, though, and ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Lyrics » Realistic, Culture Re: Palestine

    let's see, a quick tense fix: Not one day have you ever weaken. ^ when you use have, you have to use weakened: have weakened now, on to the piece ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Masque Facade

    now now, come on. is this masquerader confident or not confident about his/her abilities? the middle stanza seems strong and cold, but the first and second two seem week, like ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » Culture, Politics Re: Roaming words

    Hey there. At first, I thought this poem was about something like "good news" or a sweet motto or something like that, but suddenly yer talking about rumors? This needs ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Script » Teen Fiction, Horror Re: Script: Open House

    First impression: WAY TOO MANY PEOPLE. that's probably not a problem in a movie as we'd have faces to tell them apart, but the names are all so non-descript that ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, Romantic Re: E.A.

    Woohoo~ So it was cool to read a piece that seemed to have been written with a lot of authority about how the transfer of power happens. I liked the ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: double down

    mmmm, nice formatting of the quote, but i guess i don't understand. why use a quote you directly disagree with and ONLY say you disagree with it? there are so ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Other » Literature, General Re: What am I?

    okay! i'll bite! this is a riddle. the thing about a riddle is, though, is that it has to be possible, with time, for the guesser to be confident about ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: A name that means traveler: Prologue *edited*

    The first thing I want to say is that I'm confused between the two sections of this story. It seemed in the first part that she was already married with ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: An Alien in Paris

    okay, i don't know if it's just from reading gal's review first, but now this poem really spoke to me on the idea of being american abroad, in a world ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Fantasy Re: An Unusual Trip

    Okay, I get it. No intent for anyone to get hurt, not really believing in the paranormal, but then something bad really did happen, but did you have to leave ...

    Dec 30, 2012


See, we could have been called The Shoes.
— Paul McCartney