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Huh. I see it’s already been edited superficially in the first way that I would have suggested, but I am going to echo Rydia here in saying you need to ...

Hey, Aley. I’m leaving this review from this frame of mind: I wanted to like this, because it seemed like there was a concrete story behind it, and I wanted ...

It’s my Starleene! I’m here for you. Okay, right away I want to say that the ending of this story is what sealed the deal of me liking it. I ...

Interesting premise. I will work with it how you’ve intended it, but I think it would be an awesome exercise if your next poem were written from this Demon’s point ...

Sometimes when we start out writing something, we just let it go. It feels good, and we want to keep writing, and we move from one feeling to the next, ...

Hmm! I’m really confused. Is this person gone, or is this person waiting for the speaker? I’m not sure, because the poem starts out speaking as if the “you” is ...

This is a piece that could benefit from a couple things. First, this could be made better if you went through and proof read a couple of times. There are ...

Hey again, Purple. I would quickly like to say that if you're looking to post a snippet for other people to look at without really requesting reviews, you could start ...

You have a strong vocabulary and a strong handle on words, and I'd challenge you with this poem to let the words BE suffocating and thick instead of describing them ...

I like this. It's the start of something nice, simple, and genuine. First, though, please make sure to proofread your works before you post them up here. Wouldn't you rather ...

Ah! You are going for something! The first stanza is almost completely solid. I don't understand how something can be broken into crumbs and yet have a united surface + ...

There is only the slightest bit of interest to make me want to keep reading, and I'm not sure why you left us at this point. Obviously, I want to ...

Hmm. I think you're grasping at something that you've not yet managed to get a hold of, and are trying to describe it from a distance when what it needs ...

Hey. This started in a completely fulfilling, original, engaging way. This is the part of your poem that I can get behind and work with: Awkwardly polite Social dynamite Never ...

Oh! Another Purple Moment! I am happy this one is much more accessible and concrete. I love especially the juxtaposition between the fantasy-world epicness of the "wooden gate" and the ...