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Oh man, you're so sleepy, aren't you? Haha. I know this feeling, so I could kind of get what you're saying through your words. I wonder what it would be ...

Wow. :) I was really surprised with how nice this was. I loved the details that you chose to share with the reader: the idea that the tears splat not ...

Hey there! Here are some things I want to ask you. I think they'll help you fix up this poem. What, in one sentence, do you want this poem to ...

Alright, Kylan. I remember the reason I used to be so thrilled by what you wrote was that you had this intense focus, the way that all the words seemed ...

I wonder what this poem would be like if it wasn't hidden behind the rhyming. I feel like you definitely have something to say, but it's so clouded by trying ...

This piece really wants to be intimate. It wants to be about two specific people and their specific journey. But I don't think it is. I think it really REALLY ...

Hey, Kafka! I'm working on my piece for your contest. ALSO, Kafka is my boyfriend and I visited his grave less than a week ago. BUT THAT IS NOT RELEVANT. ...

God, BlackInk, there is so much material in here. I don't think that this is a piece, because it doesn't flow together and make sense in a line, but if ...

I think that your choice to write a letter definitely lends itself to quotes, but I think that in order to make this a quality piece, you need to save ...

Hey there! Yes. First thing I want to encourage your use of voice. Especially clear in "I got the music", the voice calls up the casual conversations between people, and ...

Hey, Polkadot! :D Haha, so I like this story start. There are a couple of things I think you should consider before going further. First, whose story is this? Right ...

So I really like the things that this piece wants to deal with. It wants to deal with first the feeling of someone who has given up, understanding (or believing) ...

Hi! This is great. This is touching on something you feel strongly about, something you can outline the steps into, as well. But what I think is that I want ...

Hi, Olivia. Here's what I think would help this poem. It's a lovely idea, something that a lot of people can relate to, but I think you've closed us off ...

Do you think that when you sink, you fall straight down the edge of a piece of paper? I feel like there would be more movement, some kind of floating ...