HaleyPenguin

In four sentences, you already want me begging for more. This was done very well! This is a very interesting idea you had, and you made it work. It flowed ...

Hello! :D I liked this. I thought it was rather well written. I just saw a few errors... "I see gypsy," The comma should go after see. "Leonis bellowed his ...

Amazing! I love this! Very creative. You should be proud of this! I do agree with dragonfphoenix though. It was hard to find the transition. But you did reach it ...

I like the way you did this. Well done. Just a few quick things! "Alot about me yet to be discovered" A lot is two separate words. Also, the word ...

Hello :) I just want to say I liked this a lot. Just a few things.. "And she would never be mine" There should be a period at the end ...

This was done rather well. I'm pleased with the way this flows. just a few things though... "Your strong and smart..." "You sweet and kind" Wrong your was used here. ...

This poem reaches deep into emotion. I personally think you did very well on this. just a few quick things... "To the sprits that are dented" Sprits should be Spirits ...

Wow! This was very well done! It must've taken quite some time to write. The opening was absolutely amazing. That's the type of opening that can suck a reader in, ...

Hello c: First off, I just want to say this was REALLY well done. You should be proud of yourself. I love the way that it all seems to flow. ...

This is VERY well done in my opinion. You sequenced everything just right so that the reader can understand what exactly is going on with the narrator without bluntly saying ...

This is very well done. It makes me feel as if I'm there, like I can see the rain and feel what the writer is feeling. The words you use ...

This is well done :) I also really like the title. (Obviously from my name.) I like the way this is put together. Personally, it gives me a childhood feel, ...

This really has a lot of emotion in it. I applaud this. It really does seem to speak to the reader, and have them feel what the writer felt. Imagery ...

This made my day, and it all seems so legit. It's extremely funny. But I do recommend you make this a list form so people don't get too confused. But ...

Hey!!! :) I actually, first off, want to say great job on this. It really is amazing and seems to tell a hidden truth about what life really is. I ...