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Hello imsosleepy! Welcome to YWS! And then I died. Or so I think. I mean, I’m a Ghost now, so it’s kind of obvious. Look, I can’t recall the exact ...

Hey Calaway! Welcome to YWS, I hope you enjoy your stay. Now, for the review: Exodus Chapter 001: I know it's meant to set the tone for a futuristic sci-fi, ...

Hey Certz! Welcome to YWS. Since this is a first chapter, let's talk about what the goals of the chapter are: 1. Introduce your main protagonists 2. Introduce a conflict ...

Hello vampricone6783! I'll be honest, I'm not sure if this story is my cup of tea, but I wanted to give you some feedback and see if it could help ...

When Solea continued to glare at him, Sergius shook his head. “Look. Your father and I are not friends. We probably will never like each other. But try to be ...

Grif here with a review! The opening isn't very strong. You started the scene when they were already in conversation. You should start a few moments earlier; when they first ...

Hello (0325564- goodness, that is a mouthful isn't it? Mind if I just call you "Numbers?") Numbers and welcome to YWS! I don't think the idea behind the story is ...

I think the poem is written well. What concerns me is that it doesn't seem to fit the character of a soldier. For one, the narrator is only thinking about ...

First, why did you post an image of your work? Any work that you post on YWS is yours, including the copyright. All it does is make it harder to ...

Hello Tootsie! Welcome to YWS! Reading the story made me feel as if I was walking through someone else's nightmare. Which is to say that it was pretty confusing to ...

Hey Charlie, welcome to YWS! Here are some of my own thoughts. Types of Arts of Magic Art of Elemental Magic: These Mages are masters of their respective elements. They ...

Hi Sillia, here is your review. I quite liked this; it had action, suspense, and was enjoyable. "She woke to the sound of screaming" was a very good hook. Where ...

Hi MrMuddyPig! Here is your review. First, never ever ever use chat speak. "Pls" is not a word; it is an invitation to be put in literary quarantine. Second, the ...

Hi Henox! This was pretty terrible. When you start a story; you want to give the reader something they want. We want action, excitement, a reason to keep reading. Snappy ...

Hi Naturesweetie! The citation in this case isn't necessary; the song "Roll the Cotton Down" is an old sea shanty and probably was never under copyright to begin with. However, ...