Gravity

I WAS interested in this. Until I read it. The schedule and the timing makes this piece so... blocky and it's very distracting. There are also so many spelling errors. ...

I'm not trying to be mean, but I didn't like this poem. It had no rhythm. You were so focused on just trying to rhyme that you forgot the other ...

I absolutely love what you based the poem on. It's literally about hell. Except, there are no stanzas. This is really good... for a first poem. You need stanzas to ...

I don't like that you chose to bold everything for formatting. I'm sorry :/ I have OCD so that is naturally the first thing I noticed. Also, you drop down ...

First of all, why did you name this poem "The Abyss"? An abyss is a really black dark place in the middle of the ocean. The title doesn't fit what ...

I like fan fiction. Especially Harry Potter although I don't like it much. I just have to say, this wording and the punctuation was so incredibly awkward and it didn't ...

I thought this poem was wonderful. It was spooky and you really captured the different elements of people that die young. You make the graveyard itself seem spooky, at the ...

I love the picture that goes along with your poem. I like the poem. It's short, but the descriptive language is a bit bland. The last line is extremely awkward. ...

This is... interesting. I'm not really sure if this is a poem or a short story, or what it actually is. And I have another question, why is this piece ...

This "poem" is not actually a poem. It's a paragraph. You make it a poem by Creating lines and stanzas. hit sift-enter to drop one line instead of two. A ...

I think this essay is really good. As for the quote, you have to cite it. So you could say My favorite author,(name of author), said... etc. etc. Also, the ...

There are just minor errors. "My sisters tiny hands" sisters should be "sister's" because it's possessive. Also, you should really capitalize the first letter of EVERY line. Another thing, press ...

"Why did I do this? I don't know?! Maybe I was drunk You don't know Or care" I actually do care why you wrote this. The use of exclamation points ...

I agree with @dragonfpheonix. You mention whispering and then light. I found it pretty confusing, and it didn't go together that well. I also feel that this poem should be ...

"And then I could sketch, all your secrets." This line has a weird rhythm. So instead of "all your secrets" try "all OF your secrets" don't capitalize the of, just ...