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Hey there This is quite good, but could improve a bit. Firstly, I recommend that you don't use symbolic names like "hope" and "doctor gracious". I takes away from the ...

Hi there This is very good. Very quirky and interting By the end it was really endearing and heartfelt. I also think this would make a very good short story. ...

Hey there. Wow. This is very very dark and gripping. I proabaly would not have loved it as much if you hadn't put in the two paragraphs at the end. ...

Hi there. I really like this. I like it because you combined a really interesting and stereotype breaking opinion with genuinely good and well flowing poetry. I think this voice ...

Hi there. This is a pretty dark poem. I love how it starts of with all this trady and angst and sort of keeps sinking into it. The metapohr of ...

Hi there This is really good. I love your very imagery based style of poetry. It is very detailed and really paints a picture. This particular poem follows that describing ...

Hi these. I can se your new, so I'd first like to say welcome. This is very good. The language is reallty lovley and so is the subject matter. The ...

Hi there. This is ok, but you could improve a bit. Firstly, it feels like this has been made by formula. It is quite repeated with all the weather related ...

This poem i really interesting. There is soem fantastic imagery here. All the descriptions about the bar and the atmospher perfectly encpsulate and distill the mood of this atmoshere. The ...

Hi there. This is very good, The single voice narration was a great tecnique to use on this poem. And the voice shows a lot of pent up aggression and ...

This is great. Really spooky and haunting. I love your use of a single dialouge here, and the sort of faulse cheerfullness. It really adds to the scary in this ...

HI there. This is really fantastic. Great twist at the end. It really added a punch to the poem. The imager in the first stanza is fantastic and really sums ...

HI there. This is very good. Great structure and flow. It is very skilfully put together. What drew me to this poem is the first place in the title. so ...

TThis is very good. I think yuo have really lahed on to a intresting subject matter and idea here. I really love the last line. It really sums up the ...

Hi there. this is very good, but needs some work. The one thing that drags the poem down is the structure. The two line stanzas are very boring and conservative. ...