GoldFlame

Hey, Chocolate! (Quick warning, my writing/reviewing skills are a bit rusty, so there may be some jaggedness below.) This was nice and easy to swallow. Long sentences were counterbalanced with ...

Hey, Flite! Happy Review Day! My reviewing's a bit rusty, so apologies in advance for any clunkiness/confusion. My granddaughter asked me about the sky today, just like any normal three ...

Heya! I'm going to start with the negatives this time, and just kind of pour my thoughts out as they come. The fantasy aspect hit me a bit abruptly, considering ...

Heya! This was amazing. No purple prose. No flowery description. No shifts in atmosphere. It was your style at its rawest, and I think it flows best when it's not ...

Heya! I hope I'm not too late. To contribute to what people said on the semicolon: They're pretty much alternatives to periods, but they can do other stuff besides bridging ...

Heya! I've been having reviewer's block recently, so I might return and add things. Just tell me if I'm unclear anywhere. ^_^ I'll start with all the petty stuff: hidden ...

Heya! So this piece caught my eye because of the oxymoronic title--I have an addiction to oxymorons, and I decided to read it. I was well-rewarded. The pace and sentence ...

Hey, Timmy! Happy Review Day! So I read this, and I froze when I realized I had nothing major to nitpick. Still, I'm forcing myself to write a review on ...

Heya! As I was finishing the nitpicks and trying to come up with a few words to say overall, I realized I'd run bare. I honestly just read the piece ...

Hey, Lucidity! Happy Review Day! I found your descriptions pretty good--direct and to the point, no flowery imagery, and the pace was well-measured. I'd just try incorporating more sensory details. ...

Back again! So the two characters are kinda meshing, becoming difficult to distinguish; I had to check the chapter title to establish that it's the girl who's speaking. It's nothing ...

Heya! Apologies in advance for any shortness regarding the review--I had trouble finding stuff wrong with this chapter. why must you be so good The hallway looks like sand molded ...

Heya, Pomp! The first thing Rufus noticed about the man was the dark crater gaping out of his skull, like a laughing mouth that opened into the wrong side of ...

Hey, Timmy! It feels a bit strange going back and reviewing the second chapter when your style's changed so much, but this novel is way too good to leave alone. ...

Hey, Pomp! Happy Review Day! Doors don't open on their own, as is a general rule, Hawk knew. Eep! You might want to take that back. Imagine that you're replacing ...