Glimmerglass

Hi, Sageleaf! Welcome to YWS. I really liked the movement of your poem, and how you ended each stanza with the same line, only slightly changed. I also noticed that ...

Hi! You conveyed the anguish and fear of a person caught in a world they cannot escape very well. I like how you broke it up into readable stanzas, and ...

Hi, there! I liked how you started this poem. The first stanza caught my attention, and I wanted to read more of the poem. The rest of the piece was ...

Hi! The language in this poem was very lyrical, and the quatrains are an excellent way of breaking your poem into stanzas. Your descriptions are excellent: I could picture the ...

Wow. So poignant. I liked how you addressed abstract entities like the heart and mind, and I think that your language is very fitting for this poem. An excellent element ...

Wow. This is a fascinating piece, particularly because of its movement. I like how the stanzas flow together easily, and how you used symbols like ..., - , and ; ...

There are some excellent elements about your poem. For one, there is a very definite emotion you are trying to target in your poem. The reader can sense that. I ...

Hi! Your poem is quite interesting. I read it several times, because the last line confounded me. However, I think I understand it now. Rhymes don’t bind They fly and ...

This is very interesting. I like how there's a subtle slant rhyme going on: "you, true;" "front, want;" "colder, shoulder;" "that, back." Did you mean to split the last line ...

Wow. This was fantastic. I liked especially how potent her anger was, and how wounded she felt being second best to her husband. You definitely captured her emotions in a ...

This is really lovely. The emotion is almost tangible, and I like how rhythmic the poem is. Your meaning is quite complex, and it's always more interesting to read poetry ...