GingerLizzy

This is lovely and it tended to flow really well. If this was an actual song that was out, I'd definately buy it because I like songs that have meanings ...

Quite good, with a good meaning behind the poem, which I enjoyed. Remember to proofread your work before you post so that you can check for mistakes and also so ...

Proof read. Punctuation. And structure. These are three things that troubled me when I read this and I think you should review them all, before you post. [Proofread them] The ...

Not much information is given on here... Why? Did you leave it so that you can continue in another piece? If so, then nevermind but if not, then maybe you ...

I liked this and it was good, but it wasn't fantastic. The storyline behind the poem is good and throughout the poem, you use a lot of emotion so that ...

When I was reading this, I actually started to imagine it as a rap. I'm not sure why, and I'm sorry if I offended you by saying this, but it ...

Ooh, I liked this, although sometimes I don't agree with the title. ^^ Men have their good days though. Good work... And sorry that I'm not giving any tips, as ...

I thought this was a beautiful piece and particulary enjoyed your first two opening lines, which had good imagary, flow and had my gripped from the very second I read ...

Hmm, I felt you over used punctuation in here Emma, especially in the second paragraph of which was mainly made up of commas and semi-colons/colons. It made the piece jolt ...

Emma, I liked this piece of writing and it was okay, but as you know, I'm not a fan of Torchwood and actually, didn't understand much, is it even about ...

Wow, this was a different piece and to be honest, I'm not entirely sure what to think about it. The flow halted in some places and just turned the piece ...

I liked this, it was different and some of the imagary worked well for me. In some places, the flow was corrupted somewhat by the strange structure of this poem, ...

The flow on this was rocky, and didn't work too well for me, making it a tedious read and one which I thought afterwards; What was that actually about? When ...

Hmm.. This was an interesting piece and I had to think about it for a while before it finally sank in. The flow worked well in some places, but I ...

I liked this. It was abrupt, yes, but in a way, it worked for this poem giving it a simple kind of beauty. You're imagary and emotion throughout the poem ...