GingerLizzy

This is written beautifully, but I am not sure about the structure of this poem. I didn't really like it, as it seemed to mess with the flow and made ...

I am also a "liker" of this poem. I know that makes no sense, but it does to me. Cruel to be kind and all that, as the girl is ...

Not too bad, with a great idea. But, the repetition annoys me somewhat and made it boring to read after five or six lines. Your structure was okay, but not ...

Grammar. Punctuation. These need to be checked before any post - that's why the spell checker it there! - and then you need to read through your own piece and ...

I think the only reason I'm saying that I didn't like this, is because perhaps I don't have the mental ability to actually, understand it and I'm shamed to say, ...

Okay, this is good but I'm not entirely sure about the repetitive nature of the word"if". It is just oo much and especially seen as though the title is "If", ...

The statement you want, the incredible thought, is hiding behind the stiff headache you've got. This part didn't work well for me, as I didn't like how you rhymed 'thought' ...

This is the sequel to my short story "I could talk to you forever" same characters :D. **************************** Prom night, Jack thought, she’s either going to kill me, or say ...

Short and full of emotion, although I cant help but wonder whether or not this would be better as a poem, as it seems to have that kind of effect. ...

[Fans her face a little] Phew, this is a little steamy. I liked it though, although I thought there wasn't really much information about the two for it to feel ...

I liked the story line but I have to admit, it is not really the most interesting and it seems I have read it all before. Nevertheless [is that even ...

Now, this is not about the piece that you have written, as I did not read it. I didn't read it because of the structure. Why have you placed it ...

I agree with Claudy when I say that I dont actually understand what you are trying to say in this poem. But I liked the flow, rhythm and rhyme which ...

I am very sad to say that I agree with the others when I say; what were you thinking? The structure; all wrong and it just doesn't work, messing up ...

This is fabulously simple and short. It made me laugh and want to read it all over again - which I did, because I'm a loon. What I will say ...