Galerius

Hi PaperCrane, Shut up. Writing that joke of a poem is one thing, but trying to defend such nonsense is quite another. Let me clue you in: You don't know ...

Hi Persephoneia, This is the epitome of mediocre. The weird pseudo-apathetic plodding only runs the message of this poem into the dirt like a rut on a rainy day, and ...

Hi StreetRat, I realize this is pretty short, but it pretty much summed up how I it's cool. No, it's really not. I'm getting a bunch of haphazard descriptions with ...

Hi DannielleLovesong, Have you listened to Taylor Swift or Demi Lovato recently? I'm asking because this sounds exactly like the sugar-fattened nonsense with which their songs are stuffed, only... the

Hi Lauren2010, You seem to alternate between decent imagery and useless description - pseudoimagery, as I call it. It turns this poem into an earthquake that raises the land to ...

Hi Firearris, This is... bad. If your goal was to create an utterly useless scrambled-egg concoction of words and link them up through pseudo-emotions like "Disgusted I am" and "anger ...

Hi Kyllorac, This is basically a loaf of bread. What you've done is take some consumable elements, put them together, heated them up via some imagery, and then shoved the ...

Hi m0734427, The indulgence of improper conversation creates insecurities. I am hard-pressed to find, in the whole of the poetry section here on YWS, a line more devoid of life ...

Hi LaurynMitchell, This isn't working out. Listen. If you want to portray a "two-sides-to-every-coin" type of poem, then it might be helpful to actually talk about the two sides rather ...

Hi Lil_Pau, I'm going to quote some of the especially nonsensical images in this otherwise "serious" poem. Here we go: breathing in scents of night, starlight and human Voices sang ...

Hi Ray112, One thing you need to realize, and realize fast, is that the same vapid and thoughtless twangy lost-love cliche that works in songs in fact does not work ...

Hi singdawg, Your main problem dwells in the fact that you raise potentially interesting images and then cut them down in adolescence, before they have a chance to actually prove ...

Hi SilentRain, There is something about poetry that you need to know: Mindless repetition, rhyme, and random division of line breaks does not a poem make. Now that we've got ...

Hi tigs6969, You're absolutely correct; this isn't emo junk. It's just plain junk, an ugly concoction of clownishly angry emotions clucking around a cage of poorly constructed imagery - and ...

Hi Panda326, Is that it? Very well. Allow me to suggest the following, more condensed version of your poem: I can't tell time. I'm angry. If this was what you're ...