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Galerius

  • Poetry » General, General Re: even our traces forgot our names and eyes

    Hi fortis, So I'm guessing they don't assign moderator positions based on creative thinking and writing ability. Because this is about as developed as a infant who just soiled his ...

    Jul 1, 2016
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: stars

    Hi Iggy, Utter and complete garbage. Your poem is a spoiled brat wearing extra tight jeans and cheaply oiled black hair over one eye because that makes it "mysterious" and ...

    Sep 6, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: An Alien in Paris

    Hi Kylan, I want to say this is about your recent days abroad, but your work is always subject to extreme fluctuations of interpretation. So I will not focus on ...

    Dec 28, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Miracle I'd Choose

    Hi creativityrules, Sorry to say but this has already been done before, namely by every single street-hawking boozed up two-bit Chicago penny pastor thumping from a little cardboard box with ...

    Aug 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: War of Contradiction

    Hi SilverLove, This is like a pianist sitting down, playing the opening two bars of a three-page sonatina, and then getting up and walking away. The audience is left sitting ...

    Aug 7, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: A teenage thing

    Phoenix23, But right now, it feels like love. Feels like a bucket of barnyard slop to me. This poem hardly sends a message. What is it about your love that ...

    Aug 7, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Twist of fate

    Hi Abid115, This little jet of self-pleasure went just about as far as I'd expect - that is, any form of thought was evaporated by the third line from the ...

    Jul 22, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Forsaken

    Hi mellophone7, Generally, it's a good thing to get the reader to question a poem. However, when this question is "Does the narrator have a personality disorder and is just ...

    Jul 22, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Dreams fade

    Hi BelarusBirdy, Basically the equivalent of splashing around in a pool of water while screaming really loudly. We're not really sure what's going on, but there seems to be a ...

    Jul 22, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: You Don't

    Hi Kaywiia, Somehow, you managed the extraordinary task of saying absolutely nothing while managing to wax on for over fifteen lines of material. This weepy tale is just a waste ...

    Jul 22, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: And the Light Fades (chapter 3 part 1)

    Hi peanut19, I haven't read the previous chapters (and I hope I wasn't expected to) but will make do with the failings and shortcomings I can spot from reading this ...

    Jun 22, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Silences Between

    Hi StoryWeaver13, You're attempting to scribble letters in the air out of a haze of smoke. Stop scribbling letters in the air out of a haze of smoke. So you ...

    May 26, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: OKay inspiration...

    Hi kjr5horses, They say half the battle is knowing, and it looks like you're right in that this poem isn't any good. But love is not that,It goes on, Much ...

    May 26, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The lake (part 1)

    Hi tigertiger, This is barely a poem, limping along painfully by grabbing every single pseud-image and edge it can possibly get its hands on. Lightning, destruction, fire, lake, time, trucks. ...

    May 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Trapped

    Hi HelloKitty87, It will be a blessing if any intelligent reader retains interest after the second line of this lumbering behemoth. All you're doing is bellyaching about a girl who ...

    May 25, 2011


If I seem to wander, if I seem to stray, remember that true stories seldom take the straightest way.
— Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind