Gahks

Hey there! Is this your first poem? I haven't seen you around before... welcome if so! If not, hello! As previous reviewers have commented, it lacks flow. You could also ...

Wow! An excellent poem. I adored your use of imagery (especially your use of apostrophe: that was a stroke of genius). Your style shares something of Wordsworth. Your rhythm was ...

Hey Eimear! This was an interesting little poem. Your rhetorical question was a clever way to begin and your images really stood out, but the problem was there were too ...

This might be ages late but I thought I'd review it anyway. I love the use of anaphora. Some people may see it as mindless repetition, but in my opinion ...

Yes: please put it in Narrative Poetry! This was great for a first poem. I mean, really great. You obviously put a lot of thought into what you were writing. ...

Yeah, this lacked thought and originality. Too many questions, not enough answers. Also far too much telling. Please give us something fresh and new for our imagination to chew on! ...

Wonderful! As Eimear points out, this is good but not great. Use more powerful imagery: instead of starting, "If you were the sky," (which is stative, and therefore telling) make ...

This does feel like it's been lifted from the story. As other reviewers have said, find a fresh, new approach to it. Maybe even subvert it? I liked the first ...

You may want to leave a space between the introduction and the beginning to let us know it isn't actually part of the poem. Your word choice, like other people ...

Yes I agree with some of the above comments. You have some really nice ideas but try to use more imagery. Instead of telling us a lot of your feelings ...

I have gone too far Just to claim what is mine. Like the enigmatic beginning. The stars in the sky will never say a word No witnesses in the dark. ...

Wow! Great for a first shot! I did like the use of anaphora and repetition here but I felt you overused it. Keep to the rule of three! However, the ...

Hey there. Welcome! So sorry to read about what happened. Although I sympathise with your loss, I agree with the other reviewers: get rid of the emotion. It's too cliched ...

A soft peace emanated from the sailboat. This is a nice image. Resting in bobbing waters, its lonely sail was loose and easy in a gentle day’s breeze. She trusted ...

This feels a bit trite to me. Don't slip into all those cliches (sic) about being alone, wanting someone to hug you etc. The first image was fresh and enticed ...