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Re: Suicide's Son
Hey, this is a good piece and it creates a good image such as 'I found you, slumped and dozy in your chair. An aged king, too old to carry ...
Thu Dec 30, 2010 10:18 pm -
Re: (If only you were) Mine
Matthew, this song is very beautiful and captures emotion, especially when you talk of 'stormy skies' I could imagne singing it and it works so well as a song rather ...
Sun Oct 31, 2010 1:33 am -
Re: Tempting Fate
Matthew, the words you've used are very descriptive and paint a picture - the blood dripping - i think you coiuld perhaps further this for example describing the blood more ...
Sun Oct 31, 2010 1:21 am -
Re: The King of Hearts
Matthew, This poem is different to your other one but makes the 'ice' reference and you use tis to a good advantage, maybe you should use it as a theme ...
Sun Oct 31, 2010 12:45 am -
Re: The Ice Sculpture
Matthew, This poem is oozing with obvious deep thought. You've taken into consideration a lot of little details, I generally enjoyed reading it and considered what it could be about. ...
Sun Oct 31, 2010 12:36 am -
Re: Attendant of God
Hey, I really liked this poem, it created an image and i felt it was planned out very well. I really like poetry that talks of angles and heavenly images. ...
Mon Aug 09, 2010 11:27 pm -
Re: Truth
Hello :) I thought this poem was extremely well planned and thought out. It was extremely descriptive and i really enjoyed reading it. Hope this helps - if you need ...
Mon Aug 09, 2010 11:15 pm -
Re: I can taste the color purple
Hi, I really enjoyed this poem. The imagery used it very detailed. The one criticism i have is that i think this poem would work better if the poem had ...
Sun Aug 01, 2010 11:50 am -
Re: It's a magician without tricks.
I thought this poem was really clever, it created a tone of what is to come in life - as you said - a decent wage etc. Your work is ...
Sat Jul 31, 2010 12:36 pm -
Re: Yearning
hey, i really liked your poem it's easy to relate to. :) i thought it was really thoughtful and sweet. If you need me to review any more of your ...
Thu Jul 29, 2010 9:39 pm -
Re: Parasite
Hi, I really liked this piece because of the description, it really painted a picture and it helped me visualize things like the having very little left of the stomach. ...
Wed Jul 28, 2010 2:46 am -
Re: Let The Story Unfold
Hi, I thought your poem was very deep and meaningful. It was so easy to read but it really interested me and made me want to keep reading. I think ...
Wed Jul 28, 2010 2:41 am -
Re: A Lesson in Dying
Hi, I really liked your poem because it had a good use of description, especially when you describe the blood as 'froth' - i thought that was very clever. :) ...
Wed Jul 28, 2010 2:22 am -
Re: Have You Ever?
Hi, I really liked your poem but i have one criticism. I'm not sure if you are or aren't intentionally rhyming the lines but in some parts it fits quite ...
Wed Jul 28, 2010 1:49 am -
Re: Vultures
Hi, I really liked your poem because it really painted a vivid picture along with a gripping end, the reader realises that the Vultures have attacked and it really sends ...
Tue Jul 20, 2010 6:35 pm
