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Um... I still don't get what this poem is about. It's jumbled, it's plotless, it's unpoetrylike as possible. It basically sounds like a poem a second grader would've written. Sorry ...

I'll agree with Via on this--even though this was interesting, it was not the best you could have come up with. It being your first poem, however, I'll give you ...

Nice! I liked this one a lot. It was not gross, as 4uiwoulddie, but actually pretty sad and sort of bittersweet. Your vocabulary carried it through the end, even though ...

Your version (rhythm-wise and grammer-wise) is kinda off. If you tried for the structure to match the theme, you made it so perfect that it's bad! I will perhaps do ...

Mhmmm... jumbly, unsurprising ending... Sorry, but work on setting up your poetry---don't just start with the notion that you're just going to write rhymes that sound good (because--sorry for the ...

I actually liked this--a lot. First off, the title really fits the poem, and it's a very good title to just attract my attention. So extra points on that... Also, ...

Nice! This moved fairly quick, and you made me feel like I was moving with the caribou and the wolves myself. I think the vocab, thought, was what made this ...

The problem with this one is it's just a bit non-cohesive, the subject is cliche, and the rhythm was off. If you want to structure your poem like you had ...

HASHSKhsdal/hsklahf!!@!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Dark Humor Is Amazing. Anytime you write a darkly humorous piece, I'll critique it to death with as much amazement and amusement as possible, because lo

Mhmm, this was a simple poem--it's more like a normal, average and dull piece of writing, like an aching headache. (Yes, I compared your poem to a headache. Sorry about ...

Hahaha! This is an almost hilarious poem. It's told in such a stately fashion, yet it is so childish, that I might just snort. Well, here are the elements you're ...

I like it! I think you had some great words in there. My favorite lines were: "And the greying of a golden age." This is VERY poetically well-done. It's alliteration, ...

Hi MADD94! Welcome to YWS! The first thing I noticed here were the numerous spelling and grammar mistakes. That turns me off when it comes to reading. Before you click ...

FINALLY! SOMEONE WHO SHARES MY LOVE! I actually remember the date which I started reading it--February 3rd of 2007, just last year. I was 13. It was amazing. It's not ...

This poem was good, though not used to its potential. The major problem was the cancer at the end--yes, it's a tragedy--but it really disappoints the reader. You begin with ...