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Gabriellemarice99

Gabriellemarice99

  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, General Re: The Boy Who Broke Mirrors (Chapter Four)

    I love this story! The introduction was my favorite part because it revels her private parts. This chapter was less action more thought and I like that. You are starting ...

    Jul 16, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Supernatural Re: Unbroken Part 1: Chapter One

    Hi your not so secret Santa is here for another review. I really like this story even though I'm a little confused at the moment I'm sure you will clear ...

    Jul 13, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Romantic Re: Unbroken

    Hello I'm Gabby and I'm your not so secret Santa this Summer Christmas. "It was like I was a bug under a microscope." Good simile but its a bit wordy ...

    Jul 13, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, Science Re: Justice

    I really do love the way you wrote this. The symbolism is beautiful and you almost had the 5 7 5 patter perfect. "One can be the hero." is 6 ...

    Jul 9, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, General Re: The Boy Who Broke Mirrors (Chapter Three)

    Hello thanks for pestering me to tell me this part of your story was ready because I'm rather enjoying it. I'd first like to compliment the personalities your characters express. ...

    Jul 9, 2013
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Scent Of Roses

    Hi I'm Gabby a fellow poet and I love your rant even though mine tend to be more intense is believe the public will like yours more as it is ...

    Jul 8, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, General Re: The Boy Who Broke Mirrors (Chapter One)

    Hey I'm Gabby and I love this! First, I love the personality of the two characters, and the relationship between them. You really show that in the beginning paragraphs. The ...

    Jul 2, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: FireIce

    Hi I'm Gabby and I love this poem! First of all I find you description of your work to be what drew me to read it, you sure can catch ...

    Jul 2, 2013
  • Other » General, General Re: Shreds

    I really like this good job

    Jun 23, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Teen Fiction Re: Twisted: Chapter 1

    I saw alot of typing errors that you can easily go in and correct no big deal there. To me something is missing it seems kind of short and choppy ...

    Jun 23, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Who is He

    I really enjoy this poem because its very relatable. In today's society there are so many unanswered questions and I feel that this conveys a revelation of sorts and for ...

    Jun 23, 2013
  • Other » General, Health Re: I Think I Have Social Anxiety Disorder

    Hi I'm Gabby first of all welcome to YWS, Now I'm no professional but I have studied child and young adult psychology and this is some stuff in my notes ...

    Jun 17, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, Realistic Re: The Two Faced World

    This is kinda a weird way of wording it maybe take out the first as and change the first far to distant. "As i stood far as i could, far ...

    Jun 12, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The anatomy of moving on

    Hi the poem is lovely but I don't think the title fits. I love this poem because each person can gather something different from it. Its very abstract and creative. ...

    Jun 12, 2013
  • Poetry » Teen Fiction, Other Re: Lost

    Hi I'm Gabby and I love this poem! I would add the following question marks. "Why does the world seem so wrong, When I’m trying my best to move on? ...

    Jun 12, 2013


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