ForsakenAngel

Wow, this is good! I liked it, and the first line grabbed me, and I read it all the way through. I didn't see any mistakes that weren't mentioned, but ...

An Existence Mundane Frustrating and dense, a needless pretence. Why am I tortured by glares so intense? Scared icy eyes, corrupts your insides. They shackle madness and beauty, and flies. ...

Dear Atlanta Star-speckled towers Proud and beautiful You outshine the night sky The darkness cannot dim your brilliance It can only find its way inside Dear Atlanta Foam-swirling sea of ...

I wish I knew what you think When you look at me Out of the corners of your beautiful eyes. When you shift your hands So close to mine Like ...

Hey, hey! Shadow here! OK, so what's in red is my writing and corrections, what's underlined is what I'm saying needs to be changed in the poem. As I stand ...

Hey, hey! Shadow here! OK, there was one thing I found that bothered me. Death that’s the most simple word, the most simple thing a person will go through death ...

I want to be real, I want to be there.  I want to be with you, I want you to care. - And if I'm not still here, When tomorrow ...

Hey, it's Shadow! When I saw your face in this magazine My heart leapt with joy At first I thought that this might be so unreal But my heart went ...

Hey, Shadow here! First off, I love the way you included the title of the poem in the first line of the poem. This is a very good poem, I ...

Shadow here! OK, I loved this, and only saw a few things wrong. What's in red is what should be there. It's only punctuation. Ive had all the happiness sucked ...

Young ghosts, playing and laughing never turning around. Running, jumping and swinging their feet light on the ground. They speak as loud as they can but the noise goes nowhere. ...

Why do I do this to myself? I'm causing myself my own pain. It's no one's fault except my own. It was me that put myself here. I looked into ...

Transience a footprint in the sand or the imprint of a fingertip in the icing of a cake, one of many and only one, like a solo voice in an ...

See this smile? Right here? On this grinning face? Well my teeth are actually gritted, Grinding and winding around my mouth Suppressing my perpetual scream. Those little laughs? The ones ...

Music So, when asked it I would like to be