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Plagiarism is not tolerated here on the forums, pcpenne. *Reported*

First of all... it's Galilei. Galileo Galilei. Galilee is, as Ink pointed out, a Biblical city. And I second everything Brad said. Scrap this, try reading some decent poetry, and ...

This is definitely the work of a fourteen-year-old, lol. I have to admit, I was incredibly relieved when I saw that note at the end of the poem--otherwise I would've ...

I agree. As lyrics, these have potential; as poems, absolutely none. Reclassify, and keep writing!

Very pop-song like. I could easily hear Lindsay Lohan singing this. And no, that was not a compliment. Also, it's "paparazzi."

Yay! More to critique! To start off, I think this version works much better. Ready for the stanza by stanza? ^_^ All the worlds touch Softly in the paper-smelling silence ...

It's short, but I actually really like the concept. And, like everyone else said, I laughed out loud too. ^_^

*grins* Anytime you need it, goose! If you want me to critique any of your poetry, just shoot me a PM with the link when you post it. It's my ...

*points up at previous post* I second everything Bubbles said. In my mind, it sounded an awful lot like K-Fed, and I don't know why. Reading too much on PerezHilton.Com, ...

I love this, Fabien, especially that chorus. "One of us throws back the covers and leaves / with something clear and near and dear to the other." Absolutely gorgeous! I'd ...

No. Better luck next time.

Plagiarism is grounds for banning from the site, fishface. I recommend that you rethink this course of action very, very quickly.

omg... brilliance, Grif. Sheer and utter brilliance. *wipes away tears of mirth, continues laughing*

Thanks for all the comments, guys! I've decided to take out the ellipses... still vacillating over other changes. Keep 'em coming!

Phorcys has a good point... I hadn't consciously thought about that until I read his review, but now it makes a lot of sense. And wow... that may well just ...