Young Writers Society

Even though you plagiarised this, i think you set it out greatly.

well done.

Plagiarism is grounds for banning from the site, fishface. I recommend that you rethink this course of action very, very quickly.

Locked for plagiarism.

shut up you lot i just plagiarized it, so i thought you were suppossed to think it was good!

Well, the poem really doesn't have any continuity... really doesn't make sense to me. It's a decent poem, it is kind of entertaining and whimsical, but it needs some continuity and a common theme, rather than a bunch of random things that rhyme... Not even necessarily a common theme, but one line needs to have something in common with the next line thematically.

I agree with Ofour.

"finger bell" - what´s a finger bell?

"scalopped" - should be "scalloped".

"bee funnel" - what´s a bee funnel?

This seems very random to me, yet again. I see it as a simple example of how rhyming should not be done. You base your poem entirely around what word you are going to rhyme with next. It makes very little sense. The only lines that followed on from one another were -

"spiral stair
nearly there
push and shove"

Everything else was just pointless. I didn´t like it.


Gurby