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As requested. ^~ This world is the only one we have; the others are too far away. The universe rambles on and forgets itself, repeating old stories (perhaps). There’s no ...

Hello, Jess! I'd like to preface this by saying that, for a twelve-year-old these are actually very, very good. I can't wait to see what you're writing in a couple ...

*laughs* Well, Colleen's stolen my comments before I could even think of them--right down to my favorite lines! Though I would like to point out that I also particularly enjoyed ...

You have given me in abunudance A childhood’s worth of broken promises My small hands stored them away Inside a diary garden I secretly tended Hoping that someday, your promises ...

...Well. That was an interesting read. Delving right in, then, shall we? Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, I told her But beauty is in the eye of ...

This was fantastic, Sam. I can't offer much criticism--a, I'm at work, and b, it doesn't need much (if any), and Clau already caught the typo--but I just wanted to ...

"A bond of paper, our human soul." I love these lines! This was really fantastic, Chandni; I love it. Though I have to agree somewhat with Claudette: you could have ...

This was... awful. I'm sorry. This reminded me of a chain letter, the sort you have to forward to so many friends or one of the dead lovers is going ...

...There are three exclamation points in your title. And eight in your poem. And seven ellipses. I'm so going to sic Incandescence on you. (And if you don't know who ...

"When you look right me." - There should be an "at" in this sentence, either in place of the "right," or following it. "Do you see who I really am? ...

The tenses in this poem are really very wonky. Typically--though I'm not entirely sure it's not grammatically correct--one would never see "I wish I can ." It's always, "I wish ...

The world was dark when Lord bore took over the world. ...Yeah, Clau's right. One of those "the worlds" has to go. I hope you continue this--with your senses of ...

The spacing between the lines is a real turn-off for most poets; why did you space them like that? Was there a reasoning behind it? Also, I'd agree that this ...

I agree that the linebreaks and imagery could do with a little caffeine--but I loved this, otherwise. ^^ That line about the thirty silver pieces, was it worth it--gorgeous! ^^ ...

You go too indepth with your images; you don't have to describe everything to us. Sometimes images are actually made stronger when you only hint at something, and the reader ...