Explosive_Pen

Haha, this was cute. I liked it. I am I am I am I am if only I could scream louder, Capitalize if. she thought to herself, they might know ...

I'm assuming this is about Hamas? Very good. Nice emotion, but I think you could have really emphasized the fear factor. [quote=]Tension danced in the air[/quote] Nice! I really love ...

I loved this. Some parts were a little hard to understand, like "what's going on?" but I'm guessing that's all part of the implying/foreshadowing deal, eh? I think you should ...

Ouch. Edward mercilessly devouring Bella? Really, didn't see that coming. But honestly now, I did used to be a die-hard Twilight fanatic. But after reading the series straight through about, ...

This should be in lyrics, I think Anyways, it's beautifully written. However, after you say "Momma says" there should be quotes around her statement. I agree with silverSUNLIGHTx; the repetition ...

Across Five Aprils Complete torture. I had to read it for school, and I have no idea how I was the one who got the highest score on the test. ...

1. ~ You don't need the hyphens. They just confuse the reader. 2. ~ In the fourth line, pattern should be plural. Other than that, I really liked this. You ...

This confused me. Color blindness isn't really a disability, now, is it? It has to do with the wiring in your brain. The most common form is red-green color blindness. ...

Punctuation was horrid. Add commas much? Anyway, the rhythm was good, except for in the third stanza; the last line was too short. I like the message of this poem, ...

Oh my God. This was absolutely beautiful. Well-written and great raw emotion. Wonderful opening line; it really was a great hook. And the last lines were absolutely brilliant. The firs5t ...

Tomorrow doesn't matter 'cause we are caught in endless time. Lies that we tried to scatter don't worth more than a dime. Don't should be aren't. We can only dream ...

Cute. It's a bit too short to really say much about, but there wasn't much rhythm. And I'm guessing you already know this, but it was a bit cliched. Work ...

Haha! I love how you over-exaggerate the characters' personalities. It proves how totally cliched Twilight is and how the characters are so, well... dumb? Well, not dumb, but... you know. ...

Awww. Who knew you had feelings, little miss emotional rock? But seriously Em, this is really, um, well, sappy? For you. You hate sappy. Le gasp! Punctuation errors. Add commas ...

Okay, first of all: add punctuation. That's the big thing i noticed in your poem. you don't punctuate. [quote=]Say that you know for - The first time in your - ...