EscapeThat

A few things with this; A. It's very short for a chapter. B. The is zero build up to the climax. C. The concept sounds dangerously similar to The Hunger ...

I think the title of this piece perfectly demonstrates everything that wrong with it. You are too young for love and as such you don't really understand what it is ...

It's good that your being hard on yourself as its going to make you better but I think you might be being a little too hard here. I need to ...

Now thats what I call a story, one of the best things I've ever read on here, if not the best. The ending was superb, left me feeling cold and ...

I find it quite upsetting that people flock to something like this putting it on the featured section while many other original pieces that people poured their heart and soul ...

It reminds me a little of the short story I have in my portfolio minus the happy ending and the poetry format. I like this, very evocative, the picture is ...

As another person who lived through this in one of the worst hit areas I don't feel this captures enough of the horror. There were screaming people, riot police on ...

I like it, I think the structure is unique, a little medley of inner jottings.The great thing is each is short and sweet and if you can't find something relatable ...

I feel that this a little candid, as though you are just talking about what you want rather than crafting a story around the focal point (the mirror of Erised). ...

This is well written and certainly gets the point across. In terms of being realistic, I'm gay and to me it's just a word, especially if theres no malice behind ...

Interesting piece, I enjoy the vicious battle between the two with the person stuck in the middle. I do feel like it gets a little repetetive at times though, I ...

This was recommended so I checked it out. I guess the main hole is that phones/internet don't work in Hogwarts though I understand its supposed to be comidic. While I ...

I like that its open to interpretation. It may well be about love/heartbreak and thats fine but it doesn't interest me, I hear so much about it all around it ...

I was a little lost wih this one,I'm not sure the reason for their parting is 100% clear, maybe you intended for it to be that way. It's well presented, ...

A little dramatic at times but very insightful. When I first started I was like "Nooo" but then once I realised where it was going and the self awareness of ...