Emma

Hehe! What did your computer make the words? XD What did it do? I can't believe they don't like girl! It's sexist! XD

Isn't this a poem, the way it is structured? Sorry if I sound mean... It's good anyway, I just really suck at poems and stuff that really look like poems.

And I thought me and my friend was bad.... O_____o;

oh, this is based on real life, everyone in the play is actually real people we know. .................................................... :shock: Please tell me this is innuendo and not some...sick p

Bump! Read damnit! And leave comments! oh, this is based on real life, everyone in the play is actually real people we know. :D And lmao TBR! At least you ...

It isn't good when it is rushed, it could be MUCH better if you took your time. I see your talents, you could do a whole lot more better.

This was really good, you describe everything in good detail, making the reader want to read on! Only problem is when you use dialog. Once someone has finished speaking and ...

Oh right, I meant it was lucky he OPENED that letter that day... O_o

I gree with Snoink, but it is also very good. I like the whole thing. It is lucky that he got the letter that day. Very sweet.

This is really nice, I like how you talk about all your past times. I think he might be very touched. I wish my dad told me stories, he has ...

Lmao very good. I don't like the beginning when you repeat the 'or's' but that is probably just your style. Did this actually happen or did you just make it ...

Yeah, what fishr said, PM with part three. This very good, but if Gus was dying, whouldn't he be breathing the words, I don't think he would be able to ...

Well, it would be nice for you to carry on so we can get an idea of what you're trying. A writer should always finish what they start. Something I ...

Whoa, very nice. If you made a book I would defiantly read it. I love your work! OK, I'm done now. I had a moment.

Whoa.... Now that is a different type of script.