Emerson

Kit, yay! you posted. My only word: space more, makes it easier. I'll be printing this tonight/tomorrow and editing. Heres to hoping you can read my hand writing...

The last line seems kind of useless. The poem is cute for imagery, but a little childish and nothing beyond that. Not really a poem, IMO, although it does have ...

Hey again =) I'm going to be nit picky, because you're good enough to get even better ^_~ She followed the woman’s brisk nod down an unfamiliar hallway until she ...

This is touching ;-) I like the... "movement" of it. Does that make sense? Perhaps no...

This was really short... lol. On another note, I'm finally reading in order =D

Can you forgive my immense stupidity? Ignore anything I said previously about it "not making sense". And, so you know, this stuff in between the not cool court scenes spices ...

Yes, I'm reading wrong. You should seriously consider using normal chapters, in you know...numerical order.

Okay.. I know I didn't skip a chapter, but this makes no sense. She just fired her lawyer, and now she is her own lawyer....? Logic is going crazy again, ...

It was too wordy for me. But that's really all I can say. I couldn't exactly pick up on the meaning.

The last stanza is unneeded IMHO... "My heart skipped a beat" - Cliché This had some nice lines, but I think you could add more imagery. Make it pretty, more ...

I think it's a good one, the image works nice. I don't know if imp spoke of it (I read above, a little bit) But the ( and ) being ...

eek.... Brad Emoticon: ='[ Wowers. That's all I have to say.

Moved to fan fiction by PsychicNija's request...

All I have to say Ofour, is a poem never goes well when you must explain it ;-) "This poem is about confusion, so don't feel sad if you get ...

My only complaint is the transition from happy children to, omfg the death is after us! I vaguely remember saying this...what was I talking about? Thanks Imp, Dreamy. I've been ...