Emerson

Hello Adam! First off I'd like to let you know that I raised the rating of this poem to R since it includes the F word. The YWS doesn't follow ...

Ooooh I really adore this, a lot. I sort of skimmed the above and saw that Castle was talking about abstractions. I actually don't mind the abstractions of love and ...

Hello BeckFletch! First off I would like to say that I love you're writing historical fiction, and I also love your last line, about "the rap on the door". Great ...

I'm kind of thinking this is a suicide poem, but then I'm not sure what the golden pot is. Strings, or in this case, silver cords, are often a metaphor ...

I love it to death. :) It's really beautiful, especially the ending. You have some great imagery in it; I adore the shadow part. I like how the lines are ...

Hello Peace! Within himself, Beyond those cold indifferent eyes, Somewhere along the bitterness, Beneath his soothing lies. I like how you keep this from being melodramatic, but I don't like ...

Hey there! I'm going to cover a few topics, so to make it easier I'll make the topics bold. It might look like a lot but I'll try to make ...

I really like the idea behind this poem! It's good to finally have an unperfect person, instead of a perfect Mary Sue kind of man. Though the idea is great, ...

Well this was certainly interesting! I like your writing, but to be honest it was struggling to keep my attention. Since there was no real defined conflict after the girl ...

Hello there! Your first paragraph is broken up mid sentence, did you know that? It also has an awful lot of sentences that start with "he". Honestly, it's not that ...

Hello Panda! Welcome to the young writers society! If you have any questions about the site or need help finding something, feel free to message me. Also, on a larger ...

Hullo hullo! I'm not sure where you get the idea that this is so bad. :) I loved it - to pieces. Your imagery and descriptions were wonderful. I hardly ...

I changed the rating to PG. I don't really like this because it is just a list of things, some statements put together. Also, though I love alliterations, sometimes it ...

I think this is a great draft for a poem, certainly could use some cleaning up, but couldn't all things? ^^ I agree, the third line should probably be omitted. ...

Oh! I adore the theme of this poem. It's really great. I only have a few comments regarding it. :) First off, I think some of your stanzas are just ...