Emerson

Hi there! I'm not much familiar with the villanelle but I'm assuming that's why there's the repetition and all? Small typo: "And you that came to ope the door." Open, ...

Hello there Crescent! First I'll talk about what I liked because that's always nice. :) You have some very interesting and unique lines here, such as, "Lies and slander mark ...

Hey there! I'm not sure I could judge whether you're a good enough writer to be well published and all that off of just a few paragraphs. Writing is a ...

First impression: the way one fakes happiness, or any other emotion, just to silence all the annoyingness around them as a result of the opposing emotion. The white flag is ...

Hm. Ugh, well I just wrote you a review and then somehow the tab decided to close itself. I'm rather angry at that! I like the unique direction you took ...

A desire he that burned him for two years Typo of some kind here. The one she gave her heart to[s]o[/s]. The first problem this poem his has is that ...

Hello love! This isn't really the place where you post poems for review, so if you would, PM a moderator, someone in green, and tell them you need this thread ...

I have to admit I'm kind of bothered by the fact that there are two stories in one thread, only because my brain gets upset about mental organization like this, ...

Personally, this poem was too long for me to like. Rather than giving me a nervous energy like the characters had, it dragged on and made me feel weighed down. ...

Hello Nadia! I see you posted asking if anyone is going to review. ;-) I'd advise just being patient and waiting. It might take a while, but eventually you'll get ...

Hey there! I'm not entirely certain I understand your reason for writing this poem - it's about your MC? My first, and minor, suggestion would be to add punctuation. Just ...

Hello there! and welcome to the Young Writers Society. I can tell you're new because you haven't written any reviews. How you checked out the Welcome Forum, or read the ...

Hello darling! I do not intend to be rude when saying this but if you feel that everything else is just a matter of preference and it doesn't much matter ...

Before I start my review, I have to ask (since you mentioned songs) if these are lyrics or poetry? Since you posted them in the Lyric Poetry section, I'm going ...

“Dad told me it was the flu or something.” “Didn’t he take you to the doctor, or something?” I asked. They both said "or something" right next to each other. ...