Emerson

It was good, it had a good feel and a good flow. Though some lines were too long, and others too short. If I had one thing to say about ...

i liked the now-and-then hard-to-catch rhyming. I forget what the exact word is for how you did it—Rhyming by sound rather than by letters, and such. My biggest complaint is ...

*dies* You know how much I've been waiting to see some Kyle and Jon action! Woo! I got my fill! Though at the whole Jon-Kyle-Asher-Ariel scene when they were, I ...

he told himself it was what Kyle would have done. Always. Though they hate each other so much, hurt each other so much, they always love each other, don't they? ...

She was cold, and he was desperate—oil and water. You couldn't write a line better. Every word barked out with a broken anger I think the 'a' should be taken ...

I've returned :-P And to what? To only be the proof reader and complimenter, I'm sure. “It isn’t you fault, you know.” Your fault. Thats all I caught. Really, it ...

First of all, no one really likes to read anything you "Just wrote." Give it a title, otherwise we'll start thinking you put no effort into what you are posting... ...

I liked the theme behind it, but it was too short and structureless for my taste. BUT, I'm nuts about structure, so that does not mean its bad. But I ...

"I believe your a reporter [comma Mr. Dolly", his voice was crisp, and his words deliberate. He had planned this moment for so long- every minute was scripted. " You ...

As requested! *flies into the room like magic* heh heh. I don’t remember why I was there; I just know I was drifting off of the roof and back onto ...

I don't know much about free verse, so sorry if I sound like I don't get it because.... I don't get it. What was the point behind this? What should ...

I assume this is about.... Hit men? I can only guess. The poem was hard to follow. Some what. I’ll dateriate your best qualities Do you run any of this ...

I'm ignoring the grammar (and lack of punctuation! *falls over dead*) as strongly as I can, and it looks as if Ofour has already done some of the fixing. It ...

I'm here! “This sucks!” I glowered vehemently at my reflection. My silver eyes glared in return, which only served to infuriate me further. My mother only snarled in response to ...

I didn't really read over the whole thing, gave the usual depressed teen cliche outlook, but I did like it for some reason. I could feel myself relating a little ...