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The clouds are dark and high. The sea roars. Both of these sentences start with the. Use another word. We reach ‘The Cut’, hurl our lines Don't put quotation marks ...

stiches in four diffrent places- my face, my stomach, over three quaters Stiches should be stitches, diffrent should be different, and quaters should be quarters. blood always made me feal ...

but it was about a princesses Since there is only one princess, it shouldn't be plural. who was about to be attacked by a dragon but then a prince saved ...

“You’re still going to call me and stuff right?” asked Julia. There should be a comma after stuff. Julia and Samantha were two girls who were different but the alike ...

A little background info: Why: I read a National Geographic article on this. I know my Neanderthals, thankyou. Where: this is set in what would later be France, as the ...

She was a plump young woman with a sweet heart. She had light brown hair and dark brown eyes. She was a stay at home mom. But still worked hard. ...

It was a stupid thing I was doing. This sentence would sound better if you reword it. But sometimes how you feel about someone else can rule you, and take ...

A windy whistle from behind me catches me of guard It should be "off" not "of." I manage to screech. You used the word "screech" already in this story. If ...

Why I want to hand you my life on a platter and feed it to you with a fork. This sentence doesn't have a subject. Why I feel the urge ...

i stood Capitalize I. on the threshhold Threshhold is spelled threshold. he had his back turned to me. Capitalize he. i was angry. something i cant even remember... Capitalize I ...

It is okay, but it really doesn't make sense. Someone knows they're going to die, but they have to wait, yet they have to warn him with her death so ...

Computers don’t breath at intervals. This sentence doesn't have anything to do with the rest of the story. I see a slate-grey house Grey is spelled gray. a dandelion in ...

As my black peep toed heels There should be a comma after black, peep, and toed. the infamous Youth Training Centre Centre should be spelled center. However, those were not ...

This is because we are drawn too misery instinctively, as a topic of interest. "Too" should be "to." Why did the members of the nazi party beleive this insane "Nazi" ...

A look of terror grew over his face. Why does he suddenly become frightened? The cutthroat's intimidating, slow stride accompanied him to the counter. "Accompanied" doesn't seem like the right ...