Published April 7, 2009
sorry people didnt like it.
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What is this really about? To me, it made no sense at all. Why don't you try your hand at writing more refined stories? And oh, please refrain from using Net Speak, not just because it's in the rules, but because it's kind of... unpleasant. And weird.
You can be better. Show us what you've got.
Honestly? I was kind of bored. It had nothing to it... just a conversation with no feel.
Like, for example.
Uhm. That just made me feel weird.
There wasn't any drama, action, or anything. It's okay. But... you really should work on it.
Eliza
this was me and robin texting btw...and it did make sense maybe not to you but to us.
but i can see what you are saying...shame on you robin...jkjk.
Since there is only one princess, it shouldn't be plural.
This part is kind of long. Maybe you could have Robin text something in the middle.
The story is okay, but it has no plot. What is the point of each of the conversations? Right now, it is okay, but it could be better.
i feel flattered and i just figured out why trinity put that on her blog.