Elinor

Hi! This was poem was pretty good, but I have two minor things. -Firstly, you should probably remove your full name from the post. There can be some weird pedophiles ...

Hi Shina! It's great to see you back and posting on YWS again. For the critique! I thought it was pretty good, but the line breaks. My god. They distract ...

Wow, this is beautiful! I read the whole thing; I'm hooked! Do you have chapter 1 up yet? If so, I'd like critique it. My only major problem lies with ...

Hi Aspiring. This story made me very sad. What inspired you to write it? What detracts from an otherwise flawless story is the fact that you practically start every sentence ...

A nice poem. It was short and sweet and fitting for the holiday. My only minor quip is that you spell 'friends' wrong multiple times. Also, 'flys' should be 'flies'. ...

Hi Classy! No real critique here, but just a quick note. This was a very good piece, but your weak point lies in your descriptions. Whenever a new character is ...

Hi Fiction! Here is your review, as requested-sorry it's a bit delayed. My main problem with this piece is that it is kind of dull. We're reading about an outdoor ...

Hi JD! Here is your requested review. I was very optimistic going into this review. Reading through your poem, the subject matter seemed pretty interesting and original. I like the ...

Hi Evi, m'dear. This was almost perfect, and I don't have a real critique for it. However, one minor problem I have is in the way you set up your ...

Hi Stori. This was a pretty good piece of poetry. It wasn't excellent, but it certainly wasn't as terrible as some of the things I've reviewed here on YWS. Let's ...

Hi Clara. This was a poem with an interesting premise that I really want to like, but somehow it just fell flat. I think it was because you didn't differentiate ...

Very interesting... I liked it a lot! I don't have much to say... but I do hope you write a lot. :) Just so you know, this poem is about ...

Hi Amy! Here is your review, as promised. Don’t stop, never stop This line just doesn't seem to cut it for me. It kind of makes me think of the ...

Hi again Aristotle. Well, this poem was a bit better. I especially like how you've woven them into a continuous story. First you spoke about the sunset, and now you ...

Hi Aristotle! I'm surprised; this was pretty good. This was your very first poem? You have quite a bit of talent, m'dear. Anyway, nitpicks! As the sun sets to reveal ...