Elinor

Hi! This was a nice poem, and it was sad too. I'll say that while a lot of poems have an emotional center to them here on YWS, there are ...

Hehe, this was nice. I think you captured the style of a villanelle nicely, rhyming and repeating without it seeming too forced. It's not the greatest villanelle ever though, as ...

Hiya! First, songs about love have been done before. There are so many that it's practically its own genre, and a lot of it is unoriginal, like yours. What can ...

Heya. This needs some work. First off, you're switching tenses; it starts off in past and then goes to present, which is pretty confusing. I also didn't like the general ...

Hi Zenjoy! This was nice, but I can't really imagine it as a song. It seemed a bit all over the place and there wasn't anything that could have me ...

Hi there! I don't really think that the repetition of 'A true friend' suits the poem. Since it occurs on every (really short) line, it clogs down the flow and ...

Hey KitKat! The punctuation in your dialogue is also completely wrong, so look at that article Hannah gave you. This also needs to much longer; the piece is flat, the ...

Hi Aristotle! This was a pretty silly poem, but the rhythm felt really off. Like Hannah said, you're not limited to what you can write just because this came from ...

Hi Stori. This seems like it needs a lot of work, and that it needs to be much, much longer. You've got so many ideas and interesting thoughts in the ...

Scarlett! I never knew that you were such a good poet. Everything is positively amazing in this poem-the imagery, the word choice, the flow, the theme. I'm sorry that I ...

Hey Princess! I really liked this. It was catchy and original, a breath of fresh air from the other poems that I've been critiquing recently. However, I just wanted to ...

Hi crescent! I just want to say that this was a nice piece, and I can tell that you put a lot of effort into it. Your imagery was simply ...

Hey there! This was nice for a first attempt, but I wasn't quite sure what it was about! It seemed kind of vague, like you were just meshing words together ...

Hey there Nike. I just want to say that for the most part I agree with Ben. This reads like an incomplete thought or framework for something larger, not a ...

Hi Em! I didn't you know were a fan of Lord of the Rings! It's a pretty cool series, isn't it? Anyway, your poem. It wasn't bad, but it wasn't ...