A/N: So, I got REALLY bored in science today, and wrote this. Don't know how good it is in terms of a villanelle (sp?), but my friends thought it was funny. Twilight fans, please don't hate me. ^^
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The worst thing in the world is Twilight.
It's just an all around bad book.
Even God hates it with all his might.
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What kind of guy sparkles in the sunlight?
At the horrible prose I can hardly look.
The worst thing in the world is Twilight.
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It gives a whole new meaning to shining knight,
But it's definitely not good enough to be a book.
Even God hates it with all his might.
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What kind of vampires can venture into the light?
And to make it worse, they can't even cook!
The worst thing in the world is Twilight.
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The protagonists have been in too many a fight,
And too many lives, Edward took.
Even God hates it with all his might.
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Just reading it ruined my eyesight,
And I keep it locked away in a dark little nook.
The worst thing in the world is Twilight.
Even God hates it with all his might.
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AMEN!!!!
Lol, I love this poem.
Greetings I'm LastPaladin. I'll be honest right away I loved this. I'm a harsh reviewer but to be honest I can't find anything to complain about. The rhythm is beautiful and what said is so so true. You really have such potential. True not a fan of formula poems. But I love how this one is.
Be flattered I rarely star anything unless it's really good.
Can't wait to see more!
Yes, Twilight is good...no doubt about it but its highly overrated which is hiding the work of other great and influential writers.
oh my god. I love you! Said exactly what was on my mind. Twilight is sooo overrated!!!
I am a Twilight fan but I enjoyed this poem. though at some places you nedd to fit the rHyming scheme a bit. Let me know if I can help.
Hehe, this was nice.
I think you captured the style of a villanelle nicely, rhyming and repeating without it seeming too forced. It's not the greatest villanelle ever though, as most of your word choice is really flat. Oh, and there was one minor thing.
You might want to chance 'thing' to 'book' because there are so many things in this world that are worse then twilight.
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Otherwise, nice job!
-Elinor