Young Writers Society

Nike wrote:My topic has really made me think twice. When I watch Ghost Whisperer I am amazed of seeing ghosts, it would be cool but then again, it would be creepy. When I see Melinda acting normal as she talks to ghosts I wonder "Isn't it freaky?" or "That would be cool to help the dead, and to see them like my Grandpa." Describe more about the Grandpa.

Are there really Ghosts? Is there a paranormal lifein this world?
I've seen some signs of certain Paranormal things. I beleive in them.

I have felt a cold breeze out of nowhere. I have felt a presence. I have seen shadows and white figures from nowhere.

Do you believe?

Are there really Ghosts? Is there a paranormal lifein this world?

I've seen some signs of certain Paranormal things. I beleive in them.

I've seen some signs of certain Paranormal things. I beleive in them.

Hey there Nike.

I just want to say that for the most part I agree with Ben. This reads like an incomplete thought or framework for something larger, not a persuasive essay that people can read and and identify with. I think the colors are tacky and distracting, and so bright I had to highlight over the words to read them.

Expand this, post this in your blog, do whatever you wish to do. But, good luck, and keep writing!

-Elinor

Hey there Nike,

Firstly I wouldn't say this piece is finished because it appears more like a memo or something. I do say I like your use of short sentences though. However, my suggestion is that a) you change the bright, fluroescent colours because they're horrible to read and b) perhaps post this in your blog as opposed to "Non-Fiction", because it seems a little too much like 'notes' or a 'framework' rather than an actual piece.

Hope this helps & keep writing,
Ben