Elinor

Hey! I'll say that it would be really hard to write an emotional and engaging story with compelling characters in six paragraphs, and I respect you for even attempting it. ...

Err, I don't know where to begin with this. First, this doesn't really make much sense. I know it's not really supposed to, that this should just be a random ...

Hey Smex, This was alright. I thought it was cute, but I think you need to add to a paragraph or so talking about specifically what these two girls have ...

Hey. I'm really sorry that your horse died. It always pains me when cute little animals die or are in pain. But hey, he's in a better place and I'm ...

Hey! Sorry if this a little late, but here is your review, as requested! 1. NITPICKS I imagined all sorts of scenarios. This part redundant as you imply that the ...

Hi, I don't like this. You ended where the conflict was beginning. I can tell you tried to have an emotional center, but I just kinda thought, "Oh, poor her," ...

Being the author of a novel-in-progress about pirates, I was curious to see where this story would lead. I will say that I was fairly disappointed. 1. PROLOGUE maybe 3 ...

Hey, Elf! Here it is, upon request. First, I want to start off by wondering why authors of poetry seem to think that their poetry is one long sentence or ...

Okay, so! There were a few a things that I wanted to talk to you about. The first thing is your grammar and punctuation. You need to have punctuation in ...

Hey Snoink! This was nice, and sad too. You did a real good job of conveying the emotion that this piece centered around. However, I will say that I think ...

Hiya Heather! I couldn't really tell what this was about. It had a lot of pretty imagery and rhythm to it, but it felt kind of disjointed and had a ...

Nice! It was hilarious I love how this felt like a genuine children story. No real critique here, but the line below should be in present tense. Oh, my house ...

Hey! I just had a few comments. First, this needs to be punctuated. Right now it's got very little, almost done, and it makes no sense. Right now the only ...

Hey Forest, This was okay. You had nice solid writing and described the Gollum character well. However, I felt this was lacking, somewhat. You mostly talked about his appearance and ...

Hey Gal! Thought I'd drop by and give you a review. Anyway, I really liked this. This piece had strong imagery and it made me feel good when it was ...